名师点评网友BEC初级作文(4)

　　网友作文三：
　　From: Office manager
　　To: All staff
　　Date: September 20, 2008
　　Our company has merged with Mason. co recently. [1]The new name " MasonGolding" will take effect on October 1st. Please use the new name in your daily affairs[2] from then on. Thanks for your cooperation.
　　[1]开头这句改为分词，following the merger, ....
　　[2]改为：routine work 或者其他可以表示日常工作的，affairs 一般是指报纸的一周大事记，或者个人事，比如：love affairs 就是桃色事件，第三者插足。
　　网友作文四：
　　Memo
　　From:Sonia
　　To:All staff
　　Date:29 september 2008
　　Re:The changed[1] name of our company
　　As our company has merged with one of our competiter,[2]the name of our company has changed[3] into MasonGolding. All the staff should use our new name since 1 October, and we can only use the new name after that day
　　If you have any question, please connect us. [4]
　　Thank you!
　　[1]过去分词作定语或状语都是表示已经结束的动作，如果名字已经改完，就不用有这封memo 了。
　　[2]改为介词短语after the merger,
　　[3]时态错误，完成时表示已经了，应该是将来时。
　　[4]去掉，名字问题毋庸置疑，没有商量。
　　网友作文五：
　　As the director board agreed to move toward a merger between our company and Mason, [1] the name of company will be changed. The new name MasonGolding become effective from next month[2].Please be noticed.
　　[1]好罗嗦的原因啊，董事会的决定你就不用提了。
　　[2]太长的时间，也太不具体。