名师点评网友BEC初级作文(6)

　　网友作文四：
　　To: All staff
　　From: Accounts Department
　　Subject: Expenses payments
　　According to the related regulation of our company, I'd like to remind you all that you can claim expenses only by your receipts .Please take your formal invoice to the Accounts Departments and the whole process including checking, signing and paying will cost thirty minutes. Thank you.
　　Well done!
　　网友作文五：
　　To: All Staff
　　From: Accounts Department
　　Subject: Checking Expenses
　　Due to accounts policy of our company has been change by this month, so the expenses payment procedure must been change as the same step. [1]Now remind you, the expenses will be paid, receipts must be taken with every expenses payments, related with the bussiness. [2]
　　Thank you.
　　[1]去掉，这是和主题无关的废话。
　　[2]前后逻辑乱了。The expenses will be paid with relevant receipts. The whole process will be 1 week.