BEC名师点评网友作文(7)

　　本期作文题目：
　　You are the manager of a small office. In order to reduce costs and improve the company's environmental practices, you have decided to collect and recycle all paper used in the office.
　　Write a memo of 40-50 words:
　　informing staff of the new policy.
　　explaining how the paper will be collected
　　requesting staff to co-operate with the scheme.
　　参考作文：
　　Sample 48 words
　　TO: All staff
　　From: Paul Blake
　　Please note that from next Monday we are introducing an environmentally friendly scheme. All used paper from the office will be recycled. Used sheets should be placed in the green bin next to the photocopier for collection. All staff ate asked for their full cooperation with this scheme.
　　网友作文一：
　　TO:All staff
　　FROM:Manager
　　Here is the new policy aim to[1] reduction the costs[2] and improvement of the environmental practices of our company. Used paper in this office, on effect of this policy, should be collected by one appointed clerk each day for recycle use by selling them to recycle bin for a profit. [3] Please cooperate with this policy for our own good and each one will serve the duty in turn. [4]
　　Thank you
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　　[1]结构问题，后面应该是分词做定语或状语，改为：aiming to
　　[2]反了，应该是：cost reduction 另外，aim to 是个动词词组，to 是介词么？ 后面应该是动词词组。
　　[3]公司要靠卖废品来取得利润么？这句话说得可是太掉价了。去掉吧。
　　[4]去掉。
　　网友作文三：
　　To: All staff
　　DATE: 19,OCT
　　SUBJECT: new policy
　　I am writing to infome you the new policy about paper using[1] in our office, in order to reduce our expenses and to make our working enviroment better, [2] paper will be collected by ourselives and then reuse them, please put the eused paper in the designated box instead of throwing it directly into the scrap basket, I hope we can co-operate on this policy.
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　　[1]Being used和谐英语
　　[2]这和改善你们的工作环境毫无关系，去掉。
　　网友作文五：
　　To: All staff
　　From:Management department
　　I am pleased to inform you that [1]all used paper in photocopy or printing could be recyled. As we know there are many papers [2]of which one side could be used again.
　　So please put the all-used paper in the red box beside the duplicator. and the one side-blank paper,pls put in the blue box.
　　I would like all of you obey the command[3]. Thank you.
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　　[1]公司新政策的发布不用这么开心，开头正规些就可以了。
　　[2]这是不可数名词，there is a lot of paper....
　　[3]cooperate