BEC商务英语中级作文训练一

Samples:

Sample A
To: All Staff
From: Managing Director
Date: 7 December
Subject: Staff reward
I would like to thank you for the contribution in increasing the company’s profit. The profit increased due to very hard work and long working hours. Each of the staff will receive an envelope with a reward on Tuesday. The reward is a trip to Hawaii, and I hope that this will be the perfect reward. Enjoy!
Thank you

Band 4
All points are adequately covered and developed. There is an adequate range of language, though
with some repetition.

Sample B
To: All Staff
From: Paul Blake
Date: 7 December 2002
Subject: Staff reward
I am very pleased to tell everybody that our company was make a great profit in this year.
Thank a lot everybody’s contribution for the company. Due to work hard, the management decided that every body would get the opportunity to add the salary and paid holiday.

Band 2
All the content points are addressed, although poor control of basic structures, e.g. ‘was make’, 'opportunity to add the salary’, obscure the message at times.