英语四级写作考前突击 Give yourself a break!
2008-12-15来源:和谐英语
1．第一段第三句中的 with the rapid development of economic, there have a variety of recreational facilities 应改为 with the rapid development of our economy, there are now a variety of recreational facilities。Economic 是形容词，不能用在这里作介词of 的宾语，应改用名词economy。后半句there have语法有错，应改为there are。
2．第二段第一句However, while as the old saying goes, every cion has two sides 应改为 However, as the old saying goes, every coin has two sides。本句中已有as作连接词，就不能再用while了。
3．第二段第三句many students are so interested in playing computer games that they even lose interst in their study 应改为 many students are so interested in playing computer games that they lose interest in their studies。本句中，even这个副词被删去了。
4．第二段第五句中的in the first year of our university 应改为 in his first year of university。原表达有可能指“我们大学创办的第一年”，改过后才表示“他上大学的第一年”。
5．第二段第六句he is crazy about it and spent most of time before the computer应改为he is crazy about it and spends most of his time before the computer。本句讲的是现在经常发生的情况，应该都用一般现在时态。另外，most of time应为most of his time。
6．第二段第七句To play games, he doesn’t take classes… 建议改为Completely addicted to computer games, he now doesn’t take classes…。不定式短语To play games在这里作目的状语，而Completely addicted to computer games用作原因状语，在意思上更为确切。
7．第二段倒数第三句 I worry he might be driven out of the university 建议改为I am afraid he will be expelled from the university。情态动词might 表示的可能性比较小，不如will肯定。expel是“开除”的意思，用在这里更为确切。
8．第二段最后两句 I once talk to him and ask him not to play truancy but he said the teaching is so boring. He liked the games建议改为 I once talked to him and tried to persuade him not to play truancy, but he said the teaching was so boring and he liked the games better。这里主要是时态问题。Once这个副词是表示过去的某个时间，所以，动词该用过去时。
9．第三段第一句中的recreational activities can do us good but it can also do harms应改为recreational activities can do us good but it can also do us harm。do sb. good 和 do sb. harm 都是习语，不可随意改动。
10．第三段第三句Above all, study is the first 建议改为Whether you like it or not, study should come first。原句中的Above all是在提及一件你认为比其他同类事件都重要的事件时用的，例如:
Max is hardworking, cheerful, and above all honest.
He will be remembered above all as a loving husband and a family man.
11．第三段最后一句Only strike a balance between recreational activities and study, can we live a happy life中，动词原形strike 不可直接用来做状语，必须改为by striking。
2．第二段第一句However, while as the old saying goes, every cion has two sides 应改为 However, as the old saying goes, every coin has two sides。本句中已有as作连接词，就不能再用while了。
3．第二段第三句many students are so interested in playing computer games that they even lose interst in their study 应改为 many students are so interested in playing computer games that they lose interest in their studies。本句中，even这个副词被删去了。
4．第二段第五句中的in the first year of our university 应改为 in his first year of university。原表达有可能指“我们大学创办的第一年”，改过后才表示“他上大学的第一年”。
5．第二段第六句he is crazy about it and spent most of time before the computer应改为he is crazy about it and spends most of his time before the computer。本句讲的是现在经常发生的情况，应该都用一般现在时态。另外，most of time应为most of his time。
6．第二段第七句To play games, he doesn’t take classes… 建议改为Completely addicted to computer games, he now doesn’t take classes…。不定式短语To play games在这里作目的状语，而Completely addicted to computer games用作原因状语，在意思上更为确切。
7．第二段倒数第三句 I worry he might be driven out of the university 建议改为I am afraid he will be expelled from the university。情态动词might 表示的可能性比较小，不如will肯定。expel是“开除”的意思，用在这里更为确切。
8．第二段最后两句 I once talk to him and ask him not to play truancy but he said the teaching is so boring. He liked the games建议改为 I once talked to him and tried to persuade him not to play truancy, but he said the teaching was so boring and he liked the games better。这里主要是时态问题。Once这个副词是表示过去的某个时间，所以，动词该用过去时。
9．第三段第一句中的recreational activities can do us good but it can also do harms应改为recreational activities can do us good but it can also do us harm。do sb. good 和 do sb. harm 都是习语，不可随意改动。
10．第三段第三句Above all, study is the first 建议改为Whether you like it or not, study should come first。原句中的Above all是在提及一件你认为比其他同类事件都重要的事件时用的，例如:
Max is hardworking, cheerful, and above all honest.
He will be remembered above all as a loving husband and a family man.
11．第三段最后一句Only strike a balance between recreational activities and study, can we live a happy life中，动词原形strike 不可直接用来做状语，必须改为by striking。
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