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如何改写英语四级作文范文

2011-01-03来源:和谐英语
新四级(CET-4)考试作文部分题序位置位置发生改变,从以前考试的最后一部分提到了第一部分。它影响着考生的临场心理,其重要性自然不言而喻。考生如何利用考场下的300分钟、3000分钟甚至30000分钟,合理充分地准备四级写作,从而能够轻松自如地应对考场上的30分钟呢?

  在复习准备四级写作时,我们应该按照“谋篇、段落、句子、措辞”(如图一)“四步走”的宏观复习方式来准备。我们应该将以往的范文作为框架,从谋篇布局着手,加以润色字词句的修饰,将其变成自己的四级高分作文
  
  学习范文或掌握优秀作文是打破提高自己传统写作语言的第一步。下面我们通过2005年12月四级范文,分析学习如何提纯范文中的“谋篇、段落、句子、措辞”并加以利用,使其变成自己的语言。
  Should the University Campus Be Open to Tourist?
  1. 名校校园正成为旅游新热点
  2. 校园是否应对游客开放,人们看法不同
  3. 我认为…和谐英语学习
  Should the University Campus Be Open to Tourists?
  Nowadays, many famous university campuses have become one of the popular tourist attractions. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that every year thousands and thousands of middle school students visit Tsing Hua University and Peking University and other famous universities in China. In the place far away from the capital city, the local students also visit the universities famous in their own province.
  So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for the students to visit the famous university campus in that it can enable the middle students to get more information about the university and they can have enough time and opportunity to prepare themselves with the chance to get into the university. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, the public tourism will have negative effect on the universities because it will not only do harm to the environment but also to the intellectual atmosphere.
  In my opinion, the tourism to the universities is not a good thing. The campus is mainly a place for study. With the increasing tourism on the campus, it will ruin the spiritual atmosphere in this learning field.
  首先,提纯范文 “谋篇布局”及结构模板。
  第一段:提出问题或现象。Nowadays, … … have become one of the popular … …. It has been shown on TV and on the radio that … ….
  第二段:正反列举人们的看法。So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to … …? Different people have different opinions. On one hand, some people argued that it is a good thing for … … in that … …. On the other hand, some people hold a negative view about this phenomenon. In their opinion, … … will have negative effect on … … because it will not only do harm to … … but also to … ….
  第三段:摆明自己观点。In my opinion, … … is not a good thing. … … With the increasing … …, it will ruin … ….
  其次,提纯范文“段落写作”。来源:和谐英语学习
  段落写作分为统一性,连贯性和完整性三方面。
  统一性(unity):段落开头的主题句应该做到不可太宽泛,也不可太具体,做到有较强的概括性才能使下文做到有的放矢的展开。范文第二段首句以设问的方式提出一个问题is it a good or bad thing就有很强的概况性。下文自然会一方面从好的方面说明,另一方面从坏的方面说明。
  连贯性(coherence):关联词是使文章段落之间相互连贯的必要条件。范文中nowadays, on one hand, on the other hand, in one’s opinion即以“启承转合”递进的顺序是文章条理清晰,层层展开。
  完整性(completeness):以设问句“So far as the present situation is concerned, is it a good or bad thing to open the university campus for tourists?”开头,这是平时较少运用的段落写作方式——设问法。“On one hand … …. On the other hand, … ….”是段落写作分类列举法的典型用法。