英语四级六级作文训练营：改词扩句(第二期)

本期主要讲分词做插入语的效果。

例句：

You are enthusiastic and enterprising. And you are one of the most talented and diligent in our department. You have already won 2 awards for good academic results.

改句：

You, enthusiastic and enterprising,are one of the most talented and diligent in our department,already winning 2 awards for outstanding academic results.

解析：我们可以看到例句中有3个简单句，咋看上去给人一种啰嗦、累赘的感觉。但细看之下，不难发现3个句子的主语全部是you，因此我们就该联想到同位语、插入语的应用。从改句中，我们可以发现谓语从原来的3个变成了1个，顿时使句子显得高级，精简很多。其次，还有一个改动之处为"good"，这个词是常用词，口语中用的更频繁些，我们可以想一些同义词例如"excellent"，"outstanding"等等。

下面请大家试试看吧！
1.He depended on his families's support to find a good job. One of his friends looked downed on him.

答案：

Depending on his families's support, he found a decent a job, which was despised by one of his friends.