解读2010年6月大学英语六级写作(4)

　　四、模板套用
　　2009年12月 六级真题实例
　　Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a short passage entitled Should parents send their kids to art classes? You should write at least 150 words following the outline given below:
　　现在有不少家长送孩子参加各种艺术班;
　　1. 对这种做法有人表示支持;
　　2. 有人并不赞成;
　　3. 我认为…
　　套用模板一
　　【审 题】分析题目，此作文属于对比选择类文章，并且题目中已经给出提纲，考生只需要按照提纲写出：支持的理由、反对的理由、我的观点。但最好在前面加上一个引言段。引言可以是简单的对全文观点的总结，也可以是相关争议的背景介绍。支持送孩子学艺术的理由不外乎成就艺术天才和培养兴趣爱好;反对的理由不外乎孩子压力过大和顺其自然等。结尾段总结自己的观点，具备实力的考生还要写出点新意，运用闪光词汇。
　　【思路一】第一段：指出现象，以及相关争议的背景介绍;
　　第二段：支持送孩子学艺术的理由;
　　第三段：反对送孩子学艺术的理由;
　　第四段：“我”的观点。
　　【范文一】
　　Should Parents Send their Kids to Art Classes?
　　(1)Children are the future of the nation, (2)the pearl in their parents’ eyes. Hoping that their kids can become the cream of the crop among others, more and more parents send their kids to various art classes to let them learn more. However, people hold different opinions toward this phenomenon.
　　(3) (4)Some individuals maintain that attending classes is aimed to broaden their kids’ horizon and enrich their knowledge in that the kinds can get acquainted with peers from different family background. (5)In the class, exposed to a big family they will learn how to cooperate with each other and how to develop a harmonious relationship with his her classmates, which is absolutely essential when children grow up.
　　There are some people who hold different opinions. They argue that because some kids put in a large amount of time in the class, they even can’t set aside time to stay together with their parents and share their feeling, good or bad, with their family members.
　　(6)As far as I am concerned, just as every coin has two sides, it is true to the phenomenon discussed above. If children can display their potential and they are interested in what they are doing, (7)then parents are expected to provide the children a chance to give a full play of their ability. But if they are disgusted at the class, parents are supposed to support their kids to be engaged in other activities.
　　【点 评】
　　范文点评：
　　(1)开门见山对相关争议的背景做简单介绍。
　　(2)the pearl in their parents’ eyes掌上明珠，语言地道。
　　(3) Some individuals maintain that…引出支持孩子学艺术的理由。
　　(4)使用亮点词汇 broaden their kids’ horizon and enrich their knowledge，develop a harmonious relationship with。
　　(5) There are some people who hold different opinions.
　　引出反对孩子学艺术的理由。
　　(6)使用As far as I am concerned引出自己的观点。
　　(7) give a full play of their ability “充分发挥才能”
　　套用模板二
　　【思路二】
　　第一段：对送孩子学艺术，人们观点不一;有人赞成，有人反对，而我认为最适合的才是最好的;
　　第二段：我支持送孩子学艺术的理由;
　　第三段：我不赞成的做法及理由;重申个人观点。
　　【范文二】
　　Should Parents Send their Kids to Art Classes?
　　(1)There is no denying the fact that it has become a prevailing trend for parents to send the children to art training classes of all kinds. Different people hold different views. Some contend that attending art classes can help nurture children’s interest and tap their potentials in such art as music, painting and dancing. However,others think forcing them to go to art classes may only restrict their freedom and affect their healthy growth. (2)Considering one after another, I believe that both sides have something right.
　　(3)For one thing, it must be admitted that going to art classes is and effective means to find out and give full play to children’s talent in art. For another, by attending art classed, the children can have an all-round development by acquiring knowledge and skills which are not taught in their schools. What’s more, it is conducive to their sound development. kids can also make a lot of friends there, thus their communication skills may also be sharpened.
　　(5) However, Every coin has two sides. These courses would bring about heavy burdens to students and thus oppose to this practice. In addition, the students might not have adequate time to take rest and reflect on what they have learned in school. Therefore, (6)it is not advisable for parents to deprive their children of the right to choose to learn what they truly like. Remember, the fittest is the best.
　　【点 评】
　　范文点评：
　　(1)使用句型There is no denying the fact tha引出现象，概括不同人的观点，最后表明自己的立场。
　　(2) 使用Considering one after another引出自己的观点。
　　(3)使用For one thing,…For another,…What’s more,…来扩展文章，从而使观点层次清晰，论证有力。
　　(4) give full play to children’s talent，have an all-round development，be conducive to等成为文章亮点词汇。
　　(5) 使用However使观点发生转折，引出自己不赞成的做法和理由。bring about heavy burdens to “是…的负担”
　　(6) 使用it is not advisable for…to do …自己的建议。
　　(7)the fittest is the best. “最适合的就是最好的”，此句简短有力，使自己的观点更加鲜明。
　　2008年6月 六级真题实例
　　套用模板一
　　【审 题】本题要求写一篇议论文，属观点对立型和问题解决型作文的糅合与拼接。考题属于常规性题目，但又与时俱进，侧重于对校园内学生除学习外的娱乐方式的关注。选材体现了当今社会教育取向的变化，由关注学生学习成绩向全面发展素质教育转变。
　　【思路一】第一段：引入现象：现在娱乐活动多种多样并列举其益处及原因;
　　第二段：列举娱乐活动的弊处及原因;
　　第三段：表明自己的观点态度：寓乐于学。
　　【范文一】
　　Recreational Activities
　　(1) When it comes to recreational activities， different people hold different views. (2) Some people think those recreational activities are great and necessary, because they can help people relax from the hard work and study. (3) Some of the activities, such as hiking, jogging, can help people relax physically; (3) while some of them, such as surfing the Internet, can help people relax mentally.
　　(4) However, other people hold that so many kinds of recreational activities may have a bad effect on our lives. Some people may not resist some temptations from those activities, and indulge themselves in those activities. At last they are (5) lured away from their study or their work.
　　 (6) In my opinion, we should pay more attention to the advantages of various recreational activities and make the most of them. Meanwhile, we should learn how to use those activities positively and make them a helpful tool for our development.
　　【点 评】
　　(1) 开门见山，引出主题
　　(2) 引出支持者的观点及原因
　　(3) 列举有益处的娱乐活动
　　(4) 话锋一转，引出反对者的观点及原因
　　(5) 精彩短语：受诱惑而荒废学业或工作
　　(6) 阐述我的观点：寓乐于学
　　套用模板二
　　【思路二】第一段引入现象：现在娱乐活动多种多样;
　　第二段列举娱乐活动的弊益及原因;
　　第三段表明自己的观点态度：不能因噎废食，建议娱乐要有度。
　　【范文二】
　　Recreational Activities
　　In people’s daily life, (1) there are various recreational activities (2) apart from studying or working (3) ranging from Karaoke or dancing to computer games or sports games. Such activities are beneficial as well as harmful to us if undertaken inappropriately. (4)As far as I’m concerned, we should pay more attention to the advantages of various recreational activities
　　(5) For one thing, those recreational activities are great and necessary, because they can help people relax from the hard work and study. Some of the activities, such as hiking, jogging, can help people relax physically; while some of them, such as surfing the Internet, can help people relax mentally. For another, it can improve our communication skills because most of these activities are done with others.
　　(6) However, if we spend too much time on singing, dancing or other games, we might fail to concentrate on our duties such as studying our working, which in turn may lead to further consequences. Therefore, recreational activities should be done within a certain limit so that we can keep a proper balance between recreation and studying or working life.
　　【点 评】
　　(1) 引出现象，直击主题
　　(2) apart from “除了”本文来源: 和谐英语学习网
　　(3) 使用ranging from列举娱乐活动，呼应主题(多种多样)。现在分词作定语
　　(4) 使用As far as I’m concerned引出自己的观点
　　(5)例举娱乐活动的益处
　　(6) 使用转折词however话锋一转，谈及例举娱乐活动的益处
　　(7)亮点词汇 concentrate on，in turn，lead to further consequences，keep a proper balance，为文章添彩。