2014考研英语写作小作文批改范文：投诉信（二）

第三篇

Dear shop assistant,

I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for the time you have taken to help me to look for my last wallet. If it had not been for your assistance in putting an inform and searching carefully every comers of the shop， I fear that I would have been lost several hundred yuan。

Every one agrees that it was you who were enthusiastic and friendly ,such as helping the elder customers to carry goods to their cars and the caser to find their lost things. Again，I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.

Yours sincerely
Li Ming

修改意见：

Dear shop assistant,

I am writing to extend my sincere gratitude for the time you have taken to help me to look for my last(拼写错误，lost) wallet. If it had not been for your assistance in putting an inform and searching carefully every comers (拼写错误 corner)of the shop， I fear that I would have been lost (have been lost 是迷路的意思，丢钱是have been losing )several hundred(加s) yuan.

Every one agrees that it was you who were (形容某人的品质时，用一般现在时，改为are)enthusiastic and friendly ,such as helping the elder customers to carry goods to their cars and the caser(拼写错误) to find their lost things. Again，I would like to express my warm thanks to you! Please accept my gratitude.

Yours sincerely
Li Ming

6分

微点评：英语中的句号是。建议你写完作文后再仔细的检查一遍，这样可以避免很多不必要的小错误，例如单词拼写。另外，注意lose这个词的多重意思。

第四篇

Dear Sir,

I am a customer of your store. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about a box of pen that I bought it from yours.

The reason for my dissatisfaction is the quality of the pens is bad. In the first place，I found there is less two pens when I opened the box. In addition，a pen was broken and it didn’t work. Under these circumstances， I find it very to your store.

I appreciate it very much if you could give me there pens，preferably replace the whole box，and I would like to have this matter settled by one day.

Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

Yours sincerely，
Li Ming

修改意见：

Dear Sir,

I am a customer of your store. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about a box of pen that I bought it(删除)from yours.

The reason for my dissatisfaction is the quality of the pens is bad(删除). In the first place，I found there is less two pens when I opened the box(不用there be 句型，可改为I found the box lacked of 2 pens when I opened it). In addition，a pen was broken and it didn’t work. Under these circumstances， I find it very to your store.

I appreciate it very much if you could give me there(改为the extra) pens，preferably replace the whole box，and I would like to have this matter settled by(因为后面加的是具体时间，因此这里改为in) one day.

Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

Yours sincerely，
Li Ming

5分

微点评：考研小作文的字数要求是100词，不要超过太多，考试时间很紧张，把过多的时间用在写小作文上是不合理的。小作文字数已经很少了，因此尽量要避免出现整句错误。

第五篇

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am a graduate from Peking University. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about accommodation.

The reason for my dissatisfaction is my roommate's inconsiderate behavior. In the first place, his friends are constantly visiting him. In addition, he regularly holds noisy parties. Under these circumstances, I find it inconvenient tome to take a rest in dormitory.

I appreciate it very much if you could find a single room for me，preferably not in the same building but as near to the college campus as possible, and I would like to have this matter settled by the next semester.

Thank you for your consideration. I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours Sincerely,
Li Ming

修改意见：

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am a graduate from Peking University. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about accommodation.

The reason for my dissatisfaction is my roommate's inconsiderate behavior. In the first place, his friends are constantly visiting him(改为visit him constantly).In addition, he regularly holds noisy parties. Under these circumstances, I find it inconvenient to(改为for) me to take a rest in dormitory.

I appreciate it very much if you could find a single room for me，preferably not in the same building but as near to the college campus as possible, and I would like to have this matter settled by the next semester.

Thank you for your consideration. I look(改为am looking) forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours Sincerely,
Li Ming

7分

微点评：这篇小作文基本没问题，但是对于固定的句式一定要背牢，而且要保持时态的一致。

8-10分

第一篇

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am a loyal customer of your company for years. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the microwave oven bought in your ship-flag shop last week.

The reason for my dissatisfaction is the poor quality of commodity and service. In the first place，the chief switch didn’t work after I used it once, which I make sure the electric circuit must be burnt down. In addition，promising to replace a new one, though, neither service office nor repair team ever contacted me. Under these circumstances， I find it quite annoyed to cook dishes during meal time.

I appreciate it very much if you could repair the broken part, preferably change a quality conformance one, and I would like to have this matter settled by the end of this week.

Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

Yours sincerely
Li Ming

修改意见：

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am a loyal customer of your company for years. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the microwave oven bought in your ship-flag shop last week.

The reason for my dissatisfaction is the poor quality of commodity and service. In the first place，the chief switch didn’t work after I used it once, which I make(改为am) sure the electric circuit must be burnt down. In addition，promising to replace a new one, though, neither service office nor repair team ever contacted me. Under these circumstances,I find it quite annoyed to cook dishes during meal time.

I appreciate it very much if you could repair the broken part, preferably change a quality conformance one, and I would like to have this matter settled by the end of this week.

Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

Yours sincerely
Li Ming

9分

微点评：作文写的很好，再注意一下小的细节。

第二篇

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am a freshman of this college. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the service rendered in our flat apartments.

The reason for my dissatisfaction is that there is still lacking necessary amenities for our daliy life. In the first place, just taking a warm shower still seems to be impossible as the weather gets colder than before. In addition, even scarcely can hot drinking water be provided continously. Under the circumstances, I find it dismal to go on with everything in the following day and night.

I appreciate it very much if you could pay prompt attention to the problems, preferably solve all of them as soon as possible, and I would like to have this matter settled by this winter around the corner.

Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

Yours sincerely,
Li Ming

修改意见：

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am a freshman of this college. I feel bad to trouble you but I am afraid that I have to make a complaint about the service rendered in our flat apartments.

The reason for my dissatisfaction is that there is still lacking necessary amenities for our daliy(拼写错误，改为daily) life. In the first place, just taking a warm shower still seems to be impossible as the weather gets colder than before. In addition, even scarcely can hot drinking water be provided continously(拼写错误，改为continuously). Under the circumstances, I find it dismal to go on with everything in the following day and night.

I appreciate it very much if you could pay prompt attention to the problems, preferably solve all of them as soon as possible, and I would like to have this matter settled by this winter around the corner.

Thank you for your consideration and I will be looking forward to your reply.

Yours sincerely,
Li Ming

8分

微点评：考研小作文的字数要求是100词，不要超过太多，考试时间很紧张，把过多的时间用在写小作文上是不合理的。作文写的不错，但要再细心一点，尽量避免单词拼写错误。