2009年6月英语四级作文预测及范文(二)

　　Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic The Moonlight Clan. You should write at least 120 words, and base your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below:　
　　1)现在很多年轻人每个月都把自己赚的钱花光，他们被称作“月光族”
　　2)有人认为这是一种时尚的消费观念，但很多人反对这样消费
　　3)我对此的看法是……
　　The Moonlight Clan
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　　行文思路
　　本题属于提纲式文字命题。提纲第1点指出一种现象，提纲第2点针对该现象提出两种不同的观点，提纲第3点要求谈谈“我”的看法，由此可判断本文应为对比选择型作文。
　　根据所给提纲，本文应包含如下内容：描述“月光族”现象，引出对这一现象的不同看法;对比阐述两种看法各自的理由;表明“我”对“月光族”的看法并说明理由。
　　高分范文
　　The Moonlight Clan
　　Nowadays, more and more people, [1]especially the young are joining in the army of “the moonlight clan”. These people exhaust their earnings every month without any savings. [2]Many people think this is a fashionable life style, [2]while more other people object to this kind of consumption style.
　　[3]Those who support “the moonlight clan” think that those people know how to enjoy life and have a higher life quality. [3]However, more other people criticize “the moonlight clan”. They say that the consumption habit of “the moonlight clan” is unhealthy and sometimes wasteful. In addition, no savings will [4]place “the moonlight clan” in a difficult position [5]in case of unexpected expenses.
　　[6]Weighing these two arguments, I prefer to the latter one. In my eyes, [7]though “the moonlight clan” may acquire temporary satisfaction from their consumption, [8]in the long term, it [9]is unfavorable to their family and career. [10]Just as a proverb says, one should always prepare for a rainy day.
　　【亮点点评】
　　[1]“尤其，特别”。
　　[2]用于提出两种对立观点。
　　[3]用于引出两种对立观点各自的理由。
　　[4]“使…处于艰难的境地”。
　　[5]“以防，万一”。
　　[6]用于表明“我”的倾向。
　　[7]though引导让步状语从句。
　　[8]“从长远来看”。
　　[9]“对…不利”。
　　[10]引用谚语结尾，值得借鉴。
　　佳句临摩
　　1.佳句：Many people think this is a fashionable life style, while more other people object to this kind of consumption style.
　　临摩：勇敢的人往往会获得更多的机会，而懦弱的人面对机会也有可能错过。
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　　2.佳句：Those who support “the moonlight clan” think that those people know how to enjoy life and have a higher life quality.
　　临摩：持悲观态度的那些人认为地球上有限的能源很快就会枯竭。
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　　3.佳句：Just as a proverb says, o
　　, one should always prepare for a rainy day.
　　临摩：正如一句谚语所说的，“机会只给那些有准备的人。”
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　　【KEY】
　　1. Brave people tend to get more opportunities while timid ones may miss them when chances come.
　　2. Those who hold pessimistic attitudes think that limited energy on earth will be exhausted soon.
　　3. Just as a proverb says, “Opportunities are only for the prepared minds.”