2009年6月英语四级作文预测及范文(七)

　　Directions: For this part, you are allowed 30 minutes to write a composition on the topic Social Practice of College Students. You should write at least 120 words, and base your composition on the outline (given in Chinese) below:
　　1)各大学在假期都会组织学生参加各种社会实践活动
　　2)这些活动给大学生带来了哪些好处
　　3)参加社会实践活动应该注意些什么
　　Social Practice of College Students 
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　　行文思路
　　本题属于提纲式文字命题。提纲第1点指出一种现象，提纲第2点要求分析这种现象带来的好处，提纲第3点要求指出注意事项，由此可判断本文应为现象解释型作文。
　　根据所给提纲，本文应包含如下内容：概述大学生社会实践活动及其主要内容;分析社会实践活动给大学生带来的好处;指出大学生参加社会实践应该注意些什么。
　　高分范文
　　Social Practice of College Students
　　Nowadays many universities encourage and organize students to take part in social practice activities. During the holidays, more and more students choose to [1]be the volunteers, take part-time jobs, or take part in other practical activities alike. It’s obvious that social practice is playing a more and more important role in China’s college education.
　　[2]Undoubtedly, college students have [3]benefited a lot from social practice. [4]Above all, they are provided with more opportunities to contact the real world outside the campus. [4]Moreover, in social practice activities, students can [5]apply their knowledge to the solution to the practical problems. So their practical skills are improved greatly. [4]Besides, social practice helps [6]strengthen students’ sense of social responsibility.
　　[7]Considering the above-mentioned, I think, it is necessary for college students to participate in social practice. [4]However, social practice may bring some problems. For example, some students spend too much time in taking part-time jobs so as to ignore their study. [4]Therefore, we should try to [8]balance the relationship between social practice and study.
　　【亮点点评】
　　[1]平行结构。alike意为“类似的”，作后置定语。
　　[2]“毫无疑问”，副词使用恰当。
　　[3]“从…中受益很多”。
　　[4]过渡衔接词语，使文章条理清晰、衔接紧密。
　　[5]“把知识运用到解决实际问题中”。
　　[6]“加强社会责任感”。
　　[7]用于得出结论。considering用作介词，意为“考虑到，鉴于”。
　　[8]“平衡…之间的关系”。
　　佳句临摩
　　1.佳句：More and more students choose to be the volunteers, take part-time jobs, or take part in other activities alike.
　　临摩：参加社交活动、结识新人和结交新朋友是新生融入大学生活的有效办法。
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　　2.佳句：Undoubtedly, college students have benefited a lot from social practice.
　　临摩：毫无疑问，阅读经典书籍使人们受益匪浅。
　　3.佳句：Considering the above-mentioned, I think, it is necessary for college students to participate in social practice.
　　临摩：鉴于这些情况，义务教育必须被强制执行。
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　　【KEY】
　　1. To take part in social activities, meet new people and make new friends are effective ways for freshmen to get on with college life.
　　2. There is no doubt that people have benefited a lot from reading classics.
　　3.Considering the situation, it is necessary to enforce the compulsory education.