雅思写作大作文如何避免官腔

　　如下面关于“work at home or study at home”的一段例证：

　　IBM, one of the business giants, has saved nearly 70 million US dollars inits northeastern region by promoting telecommuting, which has been a drivingforce to other enterprises to convert their normal working staff intotelecommuters. Companies in Japan are one of them and plan to launch the schemein 2009, which, in turn, spiritually wins more supports from the existingemployees, and attracts new hires.这段话中的2个例子(商业巨头IBM和日本的企业计划)都较好地完成了“若员工选择在家上班，会对公司带来积极的作用”这一证明。

　　此外，提醒考生们需要注意的是，雅思大作文明确指出“give reasons or examples from your ownexperience”, 这里的“your own experience”和“your personalexperience”是完全不同的概念。前者是指通过个人的学习和总结而获得的经验，后者是指个人经历或周围某个个体的故事。如谈到“working hardproduces better results”, “your own experience”的例子一定是“some 3-year-high schoolstudents usually stay up late to review lessons and prepare for next dayclasses”, 而“your personal experience”的例子则应该是“my roommate, Tony has always beenworking hard on studies and staying up late every night”,不难看出两者的区别。故雅思大作文是不能使用个人案例的论据的，这一点与新托福的写作也是不同的。

　　另外，数据论证也是一个重要的方法，同时也是国外文章中非常常见的。使用这种方式，需要注意两点：数据和数据的来源。数据的真实性不重要，但至少要看上去是“真实的”。如：Asurvey by the latest Ministry of Labour’s opinion poll shows that more companieswould like to open their doors to disabled people, as long as they can access tomodern technology, and the rate has been increasing every year by 5% since2003.

　　使用数据论证，提醒考生们不要刻意将数据夸张，这样反而会降低数据的真实可靠性。常见的句型有“a survey by….shows that / aresearch by….finds out that / a study by….suggests that / Statisticsby….concludethat…”省略号的部分是需要根据文章的内容来填写的数据来源出处或机构。常用的机构包括：国外大学、学院、报纸、杂志、电视台、之声、网站、研究机构、民意调查等。我们按顺序给大家做一个示范：theUniversity of Sussex, Business College of several European countries, theUSATODAY, state media cnn, BBC Talking Point, Childwise.com, American Institutefor Research, Harris Interactive Poll等，考生可按照自己的情况，来准备几个备选方案以供使用。