2015雅思备考：大作文修改实例之电视的好处

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　　The view that TV can bring us more advantages has shown itself to be truethroughout these years. This is not to say that televisions are not ofdisadvantages for human being, in fact, they have caused a lot of trouble. Butit has been proven that TV is now playing a very important part in our li123 Forinstance, it can keep us in formed about current events, instructive andentertaining.

　　From the TV shows, we can follow the late developments in science andpolitics. A lot of television programs introduce people to things they havenever thought of before and never heard of before. Also, it can provide lifebroadcast of the important sport matches, allow us to know the newest result offootball leagues in every country. As a result, people all over the world are nolonger distant and isolated from each other. The most distant countries andstrangest customs are brought right into one’s sitting room.

　　TV provides enormous possibilities fro education like school programs viaclosed-circuit television. TV provides special broadcasts for those in TVuniversity, or open university. It also offers specialized subjects likelanguage teaching, sewing, cooking, painting, cosmetics, etc.

　　TV is not only a convenient source of entertainment, but also acomparatively cheap one. On watching the varied relaxed programs, people canrelease themselves, so that that can continue with the new workmettlesomely.

　　In summary, Although TV does many benefits for people nowadays, don’t wasteso much time on it, and select the ones which can do you a favour.

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　　It is generally agreed that TV can benefit its audience. This is not to saythat watching TV programs is of no disadvantages for us; in fact, TV programshave caused a lot of troubles to us. But there is no doubt that TV is playing anincreasingly important role in our li123 For instance, TV can keep us informed,can be instructive, and can be entertaining.

　　TV exists to inform its audience. A lot of TV programs expose us to thethings that we have never thought of or heard of. For example, by watching TV,we can follow the latest developments in science, politics, and sports. The newsbroadcasted by BBC, the world largest broadcasting company, informs us of thelatest technical breakthroughs and the current political affairs; TV provideslive broadcasts of important matches, allowing us to know the newest results offootball leagues in every country. By watching TV, people across the world areno longer distant and isolated from each other, and the most distant countriesand strangest customs are brought right into one’s living room.

　　In addition to its informing effect, TV can also be instructive. This isespecially true in view of the enormous educational opportunities TV provides.Via closed-circuit televisions, or through public televisions, TV providesspecial broadcasts of educational programs such as language teaching, sewing,cooking, painting, and cosmetics for those who are interested. The educationalfunction of TV is one of the factors that make it increasingly popular.

　　TV is not only informing and instructive but also entertaining.Undoubtedly, TV is the most appropriate source by which we are looking forentertainments. If one is a music fun, he or she can stay at home and watch alot of free musical performances on TV; if one is interested in celebrities, heor she can watch the late-night shows on TV and have a “visual dating” with hisor her idols. The entertaining effect of TV is another factor that adds to itspopularity.

　　The informing, instructive, and entertaining effects of TV make thisbroadcasting means increasingly popular. But, for your good, don’t fall in lovewith TV as watching it can often be a waste of time.