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剑桥雅思11写作分析--Test1 小作文

2016-07-11来源:互联网

  剑桥雅思11出版时间虽不长,同学们争先恐后做题的热情却十分高涨。作为备考雅思最新的教材,剑11的确有很多内容预示着雅思考试的新趋势。新的剑11中,雅思写作部分沿袭剑4-10,只给出大小各四篇文章。对于这仅有的雅思新题,备考雅思的同学更应深度分析,练习写作。

  下面是由新东方吉林学校陈思佳老师带来的剑桥雅思11Test1 小作文的写作分析,同学们可以学习小作文的写作思路。

  Task1 小作文

  The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

剑桥雅思11写作解析--Test1

  导语:

  剑桥雅思小作文有史以来第一次出现6个饼对比的图,无疑对于整理信息和组织信息的难度加大。而该篇文章官方只给出了4.5分的参考范文,大部分烤鸭都没有办法把它充分利用起来。所以今天老师带领大家重新解析并完成该篇作文题目的全文写作过程。

  思路分析:

  (1) 切入点:

  6个饼6个地区,3个方面的用水情况。按照3个方面来描述会更容易一些。它们分别是工业用水,农业用水和家庭用水。

  (2) overview概述:对于北美和欧洲这两个发达国家集中的地区来说,3个部分的用水量分布模式相似。而其他四个欠发达地区总体模式差别不大。

  (3) 细节一:

  发达地区包括北美和欧洲,工业用水量都是占主导地位,约占总用水量的一半左右(分别是48%和53%),而紧随其后的都是农业用水,差不多占1/3的比重。相比之下,家庭用水量在这两个地区是最少的,只有13%和15%,但是这个比重也远远高出其他4个地区。

  (4) 细节二:

  显然,欠发达地区利用更多的水资源在农业方面,这个比重高达80%多,最少的也有71%(在南美洲)而最多的已经快占到90%的比重了。因此可想而知,其他两个方面的用水量的比重一定是比较小的。其中非洲,中亚和东南亚家庭用水量不超过总量的10%,而这些地区的工业用水量更少5%~7%,最高也就只有12%。相比之下南美在家庭用水方面还算比较多的地区,差不多20%的水资源用于人民生活,这个数据的一半被用于该地区的工业生产。

  (5) 总结:

  可见,发达地区的水资源更多地分配到经济类产品方面,包括工业和农业,而欠发达地区只在农业方面消耗相当大比重的淡水。

  文章结构:

  第一段——改写题目

  第二段——(2)概述

  第三段——(3)细节一

  第四段——(4)细节二

  第五段——(5)总结

  参考范文:

  The given six pie charts totally illustrate the using proportion of water for three different aspects in six regions worldwide.

  Generally in the relatively developed continents including North America and the Europe, the pattern of water-usage distribution shares great similarity, whereas other four underdeveloped regions indicates another type of smaller gaps.

  To be more specific, the water utilization of industry is both dominant in the two flourishing territory,approximately half of the whole (48% versus 53%), followed by that of agriculture, which take up marginally more than one-third of the total. In correspondence, the using percentage of water resource for residents is the least, with only 13% and 15% respectively, which still largely exceed the figures for the other four regions.

  Apparently, the developing areas invest far more water in agriculture, each having around 80%, and even the least, the figure for South America still constitute 71% while the largest number even reach nearly 90%. Thereby it is obvious that the use of other two respects is bound to be less: no more than 10% domestic use in Central Asia and Southeast Asia. These areas even use less water in industry (merely 5%~7%, with the highest percentage12%). By contrast, people in South America utilize a higher proportion of water in domestic aspect, almost 20%, half of which is used in industrial part of the region.

  Overall, the water resource of developed areas is distributed more in economic products involving industry and agriculture, while developing ones only consume a considerable number of water in agriculture.

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