老外怎么改作文smokingshoulddefinitelybebannedinpubl

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In my opinion smoking should definitely be banned in public places as it not only has delitirious effects on the non smokers present there but also may cause alergic coughing to many people.Besides,many youngsters are fascinated by the act of smoking and try to immitate it which may later develop into a habit.

Smoke which arises when a person smokes a cigarette,bidi or cigar is more hazardous to a passive smoker who inhales the smoke being in close vicinity of the active smoker. The smoke being inhaled by the former is unfiltered thereby causing more ill effects.Several pulmonary diseases such as cough,bronchitis,asthma and last but not the least carcinoma of lungs may occur as a consequence of smoking.

Many countries such as india have implemented a ban on public smoking.It has become mandatory to have no smoking zones in all eating joints,recreation centres etc.This practice may seem as a curbing of ones right to freedom especially to the smokers but surely this step will go a long way in achieving a healthier life style.Manypeople who gradually become aware of the ill effects of smoking are turning towards deaddiction centres to get rid of this habit.

Even the advocates of smoking in public areas dissapprove of the practice when it comes to their offsprings.Witnessing the elders smoking kindles similar desire in a youngster thereby giving birth to a new generation af smokers.

To avoid these evils of smoking and ensure a healthy platform for the youth it is not only our duty but need of the day to condemn such practices if not completely then atleast socially.

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In my opinion smoking should definitely be banned in public places as it not only has delitirious/HARMFUL effects on the non smokers present there but also may cause alergic coughing to many people.Besides,many youngsters are fascinated by the act of smoking and try to immitate/IMITATE it which may later develop into a habit.

Smoke which arises when a person smokes a cigarette,bidi or cigar is more hazardous to a passive smoker who inhales the smoke being in close vicinity of/TO the active smoker. The smoke being inhaled by the former is unfiltered thereby causing more ill effects.Several pulmonary diseases such as coughS,bronchitis,asthma and last but not the least carcinoma of THE lungs may occur as a consequence of smoking.

Many countries such as India have implemented a ban on public smoking.It has become mandatory to have no smoking zones in all eating joints,recreation centres etc.This practice may seem as IF IT IS CURBING/RESTRICTING THE RIGHT OF FREEDOM a curbing of ones right to freedom especially to the smokers but surely this step will go a long way in achieving a healthier life style.Manypeople who gradually become aware of the ill effects of smoking are turning towards de-addiction centres to get rid of this habit.

Even the advocates of smoking in public areas dissapprove/DISAPPROVE of the practice when it comes to their offsprings/OFFSPRING.Witnessing theIR elders smoking kindles A similar desire in a youngster thereby giving birth to a new generation af smokers.

To avoid these evils of smoking and ensure a healthy platform /WAY OF LIFE/EXAMPLE for youth it is not only our duty but need/A NECESSITY OF LIFE of the day to condemn such practices if not completely then atleast socially.