托福IBT两篇作文范文分析

　　Sample composition2
Is daily homework necessary for students? 　　The question about the daily homework was existed as long as the school existed. The practice of newly acquired knowledge and the preparation for the new lessons are the important parts of the learning. However, the teachers give too many assignments to the students. Students always complain that they have too much load on their shoulder and they can hardly breathe. It seems that teachers should decline the assignment, but once they do it, the quality of the learning will decrease. What should they do?
　　First of all, teachers should give the assignments accordingly. The different age of students have different ability to respond the amount of homework. The senior students have more skills to respond the assignments than the minor students. These kinds of skills can developed as your age. Thus, the minor students should take more activities instead of the daily assignments. They can learn how to interact socially and how to be a good leader through the activities.
At the same time, teachers should notice the need for homework. Mathematic need practice all the time because it allows students to identify and distinguish the equations. The language also needs to practice so that students can speak fluently. However, the history is unnecessary. Memorizing the date and places is unrequited. Once you forget, you can look up them in the book. If there have too many history homework, it will frustrate students. 　　Not only should teacher give assignments depend on the age of students, but also think about the different subject. Too many homework will discourage students and influence their study in the school. Teachers’ good intentions maybe turn to a bad result.
　　解析
　　（1） W: Students always complain that they have too much load on their shoulder and they can hardly breathe.
　　R: Students always complain that they have borne/ taken so many loads on their shoulder that they can hardly breathe.
　　相关实用短语：shoulder/ bear the burden of the family承担家庭负担；
　　Lighten the burden on enterprises减轻公司负担；
　　unload a burden摆脱负担；burden sb/ oneself with sth=put a burden on sb/ oneself=load sb/ oneself加负担于某人/自己
　　（2） W: These kinds of skills can developed as your age..
　　R: They can obtain these kinds of skills as they grow older.
　　（3） W: Mathematic need practice all the time because it allow students to identify and distinguish the equations.
　　R: Mathematics needs practice all the time because it allows students to identify and distinguish the equations.
　　W: The language also needs to practice so that students can speak fluently.
　　R: The language also needs to practise so that students can speak fluently.
　　相关实用短语：in practice勤于练习；out of practice疏于练习；practice makes perfect熟能生巧；practise what one preaches身体力行
　　说明：Mathematic是它的adj，用在这里做主语不妥！Practice是 n ；practise是 vt.这些问题只要我们在打字输入时稍微认真一些就完全可以避免的，问题很小，所以在这些细节方面出现毛病很不应该！
　　（4）Not only should teacher give assignments depend on the age of students, but also think about the different subject.
　　Better expression: Not only should teacher assign the tasks depend on the ages of students, but also take the different subjects into consideration.
　　说明：这个倒装句式使用得很出彩！其中give assignments和首段中的重复，建议改为：assign the tasks; 此外，think about 可以和take something into consideration替换。这样对语言的多样性表达很有帮助！
　　（5）复习单词的小提议：积累单词有很多种方法，就我个人而言，我通常选择通过学习我所做的真题或者模拟题中的高频词来积累，这样可以把词汇带回到题目中去理解，记忆起来也更加方便，当然具体情况具体分析，关键是要适合自己，但是建议大家不妨一试！