托福IBT独立写作分析

　　(2) W: America represent themselves with the eagle and German represent themselves with the black bear.
　　R: America represents themselves with the eagle and German represents themselves with the black bear.
　　For example, the eagle represents America and the black bear represents German.
　　represent的正确使用：
　　Represent sth/sb with/ as sth=symbolize sth/ sb with/as sth
　　例句：The poet has represents/ symbolizes his lover with a flower.
　　表示象征、标志代表的实用短语总结：
　　√Stand for
　　√be equivalent of somebody/ something
　　√be a symbol of something: The lion is the symbol of courage.
　　be a symbol for something表示符号、记号: On maps, a cross is the symbol for the church.
　　说明：因为在这篇文章中重复多次地使用Represent这个词，这对这位托友的语言多样性表达有一定的影响，所以以上我列举了一些它的同义词和同义短语，并且把文章中涉及Represent的句子都作了改正，大家留意一下。
　　（3）固定短语搭配的正确使用
　　W: But panda is on the verge of extinction in the world because of people kill them.
　　R: But panda is on the verge of extinction in the world because people kill them.
　　W: So it is a long and great history and scientists are very interesting with them.
　　R: So it is a long and great history and scientists are very interested with them.
　　说明：固定短语搭配的正确使用无论在口语中还是写作中都至关重要！当然文章中也有用得出彩的实用短语，譬如：is intertwined with。它相当于be linked with。
　　（4）W: They thought panda is a magical and mystical animal that can prevent natural disaster. And the lovely panda also can enjoy all the people see them.
　　R: They thought panda is a magical and mystical animal that can prevent from natural disaster. And the lovely panda also can attract/ draw all the people to see them.
　　说明：表示抵御自然灾害时，除了prevent from，withdraw也可以用来修饰。但是resist却不可以。当表示不受某事物影响或者损害时，resist常常拿来修饰resist heat/ frost/ disease。当表示抵抗敌人进攻时，withdraw和resist都OK： withdraw/ resist attacks。
　　(5)要养成勤查字典的好习惯！
　　虽然说在这个科技高度发展，计算机、快译通等等泛滥的时代，提到字典都会觉得有点过时，其实这是一种大错特错的观点，有好多的单词或者是短语在快译通的解释中都很片面，并不适合大家用在某些文章中，这会导致许多错误甚至是笑话。我记得我在上大学时的开始，我们老师就禁止我们使用快译通等快捷工具，因此查字典的良好习惯一直保留到了现在，我相信它会使我终生受益！譬如文章中：In modern time, China often sent the panda to the friendly country as a sign of kinship. kinship表示血族关系，所以建议改为：amity.