词汇让你的托福作文“动”起来
6.修改前:We know that sometimes success is measured by how much money you earn.
修改后:It does not surprise us to discover that sometimes success is measured in terms of the money you earn.
解析:
如上句的“believe”一样,“know”也是非常初级的词汇,作文中出现“I believe that…,I know that…”这样的表达只能体现考生写作技巧的稚嫩,用“It does not surprise us to discover that…”替换“We know that…”并没有改变原句的含义,却使全句顿时增添了亮点。
7.修改前:We all know that most factories would be of no use if there were not clean water supply.
修改后:It goes without saying that most factories would be of no use if there were not clean water supply.
解析:
同上例一样,“know”这样的初级词汇应避免在作文中使用,It goes without saying that…是一个固定结构,意思是“……是不言而喻的”,常在作文中用来引经据典或表明一个尽人皆知的道理,类似的表达还有:
An old saying goes that…
Proverb goes that…
It is universally acknowledged that…
It is generally accepted that…
8.修改前:Some other people think that people should read extensively.
修改后:Another position says that people should read extensively.
解析:
同know,believe一样,think也应该尽量避免使用,修改后的句子中是用Another position says that…代替think提出另一种观点,也可以用hold a point of view,hold the opinion这样的短语替换。
9.修改前:The unexpected win of the match give us confidence.
修改后:The unexpected win of the match boost our confidence.
解析:
“give”也属于英语中最初级、最基本的词汇,只表示“给,给予”这个动作,不涉及动作的性质和状态,若表示增添信心,增强士气,比较地道的说法是用“boost confidence/morale”,如:The change of management has boosted morale throughout the company.管理模式的改变使整个公司上下士气倍受鼓舞。
10.修改前:The use of drugs has increased greatly in the last ten years.
修改后:The use of drugs has increased significantly in the last ten years.
解析:
greatly是一般用语,表示程度高,“很,非常”,使用相当普遍而没有新意,在写作中应尽量避免使用这些通俗而又陈旧的词汇,应换用一些更加正式,更有说服力的词语,例如significantly表示达到了非常重要的或可观的程度,“重大的,可观的”,能够具体说明药品使用方面,增长幅度巨大。significantly还可以替换成considerably,tremendously等,同样具有不错的表达效果。
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