2013年托福考试写作资料：独立写作（9）

　　Some people believe that it is one of the most important value in many relationships to tell the truth all the time. However, it cannot be always the best choice to tell the truth in many situations. Sometimes white lies are indispensible to keep relationships more lively and dilightly. There are some examples to support this idea.

　　Firstly, in the relationships between lovers, it is often essential to compliment their lovers on their appearance and their behavior. Even though they do not think that their boyfriend or girlfriend looks good on their new shoes and new clothes, it will probably diss them by telling the truth. On the other hand, little compliments will make them confident and happy making their relationship more tight.

　　Secondly, parents need to encourage their children by telling lies. Even if they are doing bad work on studying or exercising, telling the truth will hurt their hearts. What they need is a little encouraging words instead of truthful words.

　　Thirdly, for some patients telling them their current state of their desease will probably desperate them. It is accepted publically not to let the patients know the truth. They may be able to have hope to overcome their desease without knowing the truth.

　　In conclusion, it is not always better to tell the truth than lies. Some lies are acceptable in terms of making people’s life more profusely. Not everybody has to know the truth, and it will lead them more happier not knowing it. In these cases, white lies are worth to be regarded as a virtue of people’s relationships.

　　Rater’s Comments

　　This essay focuses on explaining why “white lies” are sometimes appropriate. The explanations here are “somewhat developed.” Each example supports the writer’s main point, but in every case, the writer does not say why the positive effect of the “white lie” outweighs any negative effect. There is inconsistent control of structure and vocabulary, with some errors in both structure and vocabulary obscuring meaning: “keep relationships… delightly,” “will probably desperate them,” “making peoples life more profusely,” “it will lead them more happier not knowing it.” These weaknesses and errors earn this essay a score of 3.