托福写作的范文赏析

　　Score 5 Response

　　The lecturer talks about research conducted by a firm that used the group system to handle their work. He says that the theory stated in the passage was very different and somewhat inaccurate when compared to what happened for real.

　　First, some members got free rides. That is, some didn’t work hard but got recognition for the success nonetheless. This also indicates that people who worked hard was not given recognition they should have got. In other words, they weren’t given the opportunity to “shine.” This directly contradicts what the passage indicates.

　　Second, groups were slow in progress. The passage says that groups are more responsive than individuals because of the number of people involved and their aggregated resources. However, the speaker talks about how the firm found out that groups were slower than individuals in decision making. Groups needed more time for meetings, which are necessary procedures in decision making. This was another part where experience contradicted theory.

　　Third, influential people might emerge, and lead the group towards glory or failure. If the influential people are going in the right direction, there would be no problem. But in cases where they go in the wrong direction there would be no problem. But in cases where they go in the wrong direction, there is nobody that has enough influence to counter the decision made. In other words, the group might turn into a dictatorship, with the influential party as the leader, and might be less flexible in thinking. They might become one-sided, and thus fail to succeed.

　　Score 4 Response

　　The lecture that followed the paragraph on the team work in organizations, gave some negative views of the team work itself. Firstly, though it was said in the paragraph that the whole team idea would probably be faster than the individual work, it was said in the lecture just the opposite: it could actually be a lot slower. That is because team members would sometimes take more time than needed just to reach the same conclusions, or just even to simply decide where to go from certain pint to the next on.

　　Secondly, paragraph suggests that by doing work as a team might give you an “edge,” the lecture suggests that that might also be a negative thing as well. The people who made themselves leaders in the group may just be wrong in certain decisions, or just simple thing something is so creative, when in reality it is not and it would not work, but the rest of the people would nevertheless still follow them, and end up not doing well at all.

　　And lastly, paragraph says that everyone feels responsible for their own part, and all together they are all more effective as a team. The lecture suggests quite the opposite in this case as well. It suggests that some team members are there only for the “free ride”, and they don’t do much of anything to contribute, but still get the credit as a whole.

　　Score 3 Response

　　The lecturer provides the opposite opinion concerning what the article offered. The team work often brings negative effects. As we all know superficially, team work and team spirits are quite popular in today’s business world and also the fashionable terms.

　　However, the lecturer find deeper and hiding results.

　　Firstly, the working results of team members can’t be fully valued. For example, if a team member does nothing in the process of team discussion, decision making and final practice, his or her work delinquency will not be recognized because we only emphasize team work. Also, the real excellent and creative member’s work might be obliterated for the same reason.

　　Secondly, the team work might lose its value when team members are leading by several influential people in the group. One of the essential merits of team is to avoid the individual wrong. But one or two influential or persuasive people will make the team useless.

　　Thirdly, team work oftem become the excuse of taking responsibility. All in charge, nobody care.

　　All in all, what we should do is the fully distinguish the advantages and disadvantages of a concept or widely used method. That is to keep the common sense.

　　Score 2 Response

　　In a company’s experiment, some new projects were planed and accomplished by different teams. Some teams got very good results while some teams didn’t. That is to say it is not nessesary for teams to achieve more than individuals do because some team members may only contribute a little in a team for they may relying on the others to do the majority.

　　Another thing is the recognition for the achievement by the team is for the whole team, for everyone in the team. It’s not only the dicision makers in the team feel good after successfully finishing the project, but also every member in the team.

　　It is also showed in the lecture that in a team with one or two leaders, sometimes good ideas from some team member are dropped and ignored while sometimes they may be highly creative. In some teams decisions were made without collecting ideas from all team members. Then it would be hard to achieve creative solutions.

　　For those failed projects, blames are always given to the whole team even though it’s the leader or someone in the team who caught the unexpected result.