托福写作范文点评和思路解析：带给学校的改变

　　写作难点话题一览

　　What change do you want to make in a school you attended?

　　If you could make one important change in a school that you attended, what change would you make? Use reasons and specific examples to support your answer.

　　写作思路展开结构分析

　　这道题目本质上是希望考生给自己上过的学校提提意见，因此大家需要注意两点，一个是要切合实际，不要提一些不可能实现的改变，另一点是最好能够联系自身的经历来说，比如自己上过的学校有哪个地方不太好等等。小编相信大家对于自己的学校都是存在一些不满意的地方的，从这个出发点来思考比较容易找到展开的方向。

　　本话题高分范文赏析

　　While the school system in China is generally quite good, there is one problem that I have found prevalent through all of my years of education. The problem is that the teacher to student ratio is too small. This situation was of no benefit to anyone: the teachers, or the students. If there were more teachers in each school, class sizes would be smaller, there would be a greater diversity of knowledge and information, and teachers would be less tired, and would therefore give better classes. Class sizes are overwhelmingly large in China. In many of the courses offered in elementary school and high school, there are over forty students in a class. It is very difficult to learn in this type of situation. The teacher has no time to spend with individual students who need extra help, and students are often embarrassed to ask questions in front of so many other students. If class sizes could be shrunk, the learning curve in most courses would rise dramatically. With more teachers at every school, the collective mass of knowledge and information would rise. Everyone in the world has his/her own very particular set of information. People are like snowflakes; each person is different and has varied experiences from the next person. With more people at a school, there is a wider knowledge base to draw from. This would obviously be an advantage to students, as schools could offer a wider range of courses in a variety of fields of study. Therefore, if I was given the opportunity to change one thing in the high school that I once attended, I would like to try to recruit more qualified teachers and give them more decent pays. This would benefit everyone. It is an unfortunate fact that most school districts cannot afford to make this happen.