2010年6月大学英语四级写作思路突破(5)
2010-03-01来源:和谐英语
训练二
【范文】
A Boom in Continuing Education
From the graph, we can learn the number of continuing education participants has kept increasing from 2002 to 2008 in X city. In 2002 there were only 20 thousand people taking part in the continuing education, but in 2004 the number grew to 70 thousand, and in 2006 150, and by 2008, the number has reached 230 thousand. It can be seen easily that continuing education is gaining more and more popularity。
The following reasons are responsible for this boom in continuing education. Firstly, during the work many people begin to realize what they have learned in schools is far from enough. So they turn to continuing education to gain more knowledge and skills. Moreover, as the science and technology in China are developing very fast, adults after graduation have to refresh themselves. In addition, in modern society, those without bachelor's degrees or above are less competitive。
As far as I am concerned, the boom in continuing education is a necessity. It provides those on-the-job people with chances to get advanced degrees and gain more knowledge. As our society develops, more and more people will receive continuing education in the future。
【点评】
文章提纲式图表作文。第一段对图表反映数据进行介绍。第二段运用The following reasons are responsible for顺势提出这种现象产生的原因。第三段作者用As far as I am concerned提出自己的观点，使文章结构紧凑，层次分明。
本文使用了描述数量的词汇increasing from …to …, grew to …，reached 以及In addition，provides … with…, to get advanced degrees and gain more knowledge等一些精彩的语言，成为文章亮点。
训练三
【范文】
On Water Shortage
No one can have failed to notice the fact that water shortage is a grave problem with which the whole world is confronted. Actually, it has become so widespread that it has severely affected people’s daily life and hindered the development of the global economy.
A number of factors could account for the problem, but the following might be the critical ones. To begin with, with the development of agriculture and industry, an increasing amount of water is needed. In addition, the ever-increasing population is another leading cause of water shortage. Besides, the global tendency of warming up also contributes to the problem. What’s worse, pollution and waste of fresh water aggravate the situation.
In view of the seriousness of the problem, effective measures must be taken before things get worse. First, it is essential that laws and regulations be worked out and enforced to protect water resources. Secondly, people should enhance their awareness of saving water. With these measures taken, it is reasonable for us to expect a brighter future. 和谐英语学习网
【点评】
文章以描述人类面临水资源匮乏问题进入主题并且对人们的生活造成影响，逐步引伸到造成水资源匮乏的原因，最后提出解决措施进行展望。文章内容符合提纲要求，并且文章使用so…that…;it is essential that +虚拟语气等句式，以及account for，ever-increasing，contributes to，In view of 等词汇的使用显示出考生的语言功底。另外，第二段to begin with, in addition和第三段First, Secondly的使用使论述层次清晰。
【范文】
A Boom in Continuing Education
From the graph, we can learn the number of continuing education participants has kept increasing from 2002 to 2008 in X city. In 2002 there were only 20 thousand people taking part in the continuing education, but in 2004 the number grew to 70 thousand, and in 2006 150, and by 2008, the number has reached 230 thousand. It can be seen easily that continuing education is gaining more and more popularity。
The following reasons are responsible for this boom in continuing education. Firstly, during the work many people begin to realize what they have learned in schools is far from enough. So they turn to continuing education to gain more knowledge and skills. Moreover, as the science and technology in China are developing very fast, adults after graduation have to refresh themselves. In addition, in modern society, those without bachelor's degrees or above are less competitive。
As far as I am concerned, the boom in continuing education is a necessity. It provides those on-the-job people with chances to get advanced degrees and gain more knowledge. As our society develops, more and more people will receive continuing education in the future。
【点评】
文章提纲式图表作文。第一段对图表反映数据进行介绍。第二段运用The following reasons are responsible for顺势提出这种现象产生的原因。第三段作者用As far as I am concerned提出自己的观点，使文章结构紧凑，层次分明。
本文使用了描述数量的词汇increasing from …to …, grew to …，reached 以及In addition，provides … with…, to get advanced degrees and gain more knowledge等一些精彩的语言，成为文章亮点。
训练三
【范文】
On Water Shortage
No one can have failed to notice the fact that water shortage is a grave problem with which the whole world is confronted. Actually, it has become so widespread that it has severely affected people’s daily life and hindered the development of the global economy.
A number of factors could account for the problem, but the following might be the critical ones. To begin with, with the development of agriculture and industry, an increasing amount of water is needed. In addition, the ever-increasing population is another leading cause of water shortage. Besides, the global tendency of warming up also contributes to the problem. What’s worse, pollution and waste of fresh water aggravate the situation.
In view of the seriousness of the problem, effective measures must be taken before things get worse. First, it is essential that laws and regulations be worked out and enforced to protect water resources. Secondly, people should enhance their awareness of saving water. With these measures taken, it is reasonable for us to expect a brighter future. 和谐英语学习网
【点评】
文章以描述人类面临水资源匮乏问题进入主题并且对人们的生活造成影响，逐步引伸到造成水资源匮乏的原因，最后提出解决措施进行展望。文章内容符合提纲要求，并且文章使用so…that…;it is essential that +虚拟语气等句式，以及account for，ever-increasing，contributes to，In view of 等词汇的使用显示出考生的语言功底。另外，第二段to begin with, in addition和第三段First, Secondly的使用使论述层次清晰。
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