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冲击波英语专四系列：作文之范文赏析--大学生收入来源

2012-12-24来源:互联网

题目：Income Sources of College Students

写作要求

According to an investigation, half of the income of American students comes from their parents, ﬁfteen percent comes from scholarships and the rest from part-time jobs; while ninety percent of Chinese students’ income comes from their parents. What do you think of the result of this investigation?

Write on Answer Sheet Two a composition of about 200 words on the following topic:

Income Sources of College Students

You are to write in three parts.

In the ﬁrst part, state speciﬁ cally what your idea is.

In the second part, provide reasons to support your opinion OR describe your idea.

In the last part, bring what you have written to a natural conclusion or a summary.

Marks will be awarded for content, organization, grammar and appropriateness. Failure to follow the instructions may result in a loss of marks.

审题思路

本题是一道个人观点表达型的题目，表述自己对中美大学生收入来源差异的看法，可以从以下几方面着手：

思路1：可以写导致这种现象出现的原因；

思路2 ：可以写这种差异将来会不会发生变化，变化的原因是什么；

思路3 ：也可以写这种差异反映了什么样的问题；

思路4 ：还可以写通过什么措施来消除这种差异。

范文赏析

Income Sources of College Students

According to the investigation, Chinese students rely much more on their parents for financial support than their American counterparts . As far as I’m concerned, there are many reasons behind the gap and it will change in the future.

引言部分：作者先概述了题目给出的内容，这点很重要，如果只是简单复述，会留下文字驾驭能力不足的印象。接着明确说明下文要写的内容：原因和未来的趋势。

In my opinion, the main reason lies in the sense of independence. American students are taught to be independent when they are very young. For example, they will have to earn their own pocket money by helping with the house chores or doing part-time jobs since their childhood. On the contrary, Chinese students are taken such good are of that it is very difficult for them to live on eir own. In other words, American parents treat their children in college as responsible adults while Chinese parents will take it for granted that they should help their children in all ways as long as the children need it. As a result, Chinese American peers do. What’s more, Chinese students have fewer opportunities to find part-time jobs.

主体部分：作者重点给出了一个独立性差异的原因，并进而引申说明父母观点的差异导致了孩子独立性的差异，这里除了运用对比以外还通过举例证明自己的观点。除此以外，作者另外说明中国学生找兼职的机会少，这也是造成这一差异的原因。

However, the gap will narrow gradually in the future. Nowadays more and more Chinese students are seeking part-time jobs as they’re eager to acquire some social skills and earn some money, which will help them to do more in school and to live independently. As to the American students, I think the sources of American students’ income will remain the same.

总结部分：这个结尾是属于预测性的，认为这种差异会慢慢缩小，并给出了原因。

亮点回放

1. rely: “依靠”，常用搭配为rely on sb. for sth. ，近义词为depend on sb. for sth.。

2. financial support: “财务支持” ；这里用的是一个比较正式的说法，非正式的说法其实就是money 。

3. counterpart :“对手、职位（地位）相当的人 ”；这是个正式用词，其实就是指American students。

4. behind the gap: “在这差异背后”；实际上在这里这个词组是“解释这个差异”的意思。

5. lie in: “在于”；也可以用consist in来代替。

6. pocket money: “零花钱”；此处也可以用allowance来代替。

7. house chores: “家务活” ；也可以用family chores来代替。

8. in other words: “换句话说” ，在这里其实起到了一个递进的作用。

9. take it for granted: “想当然认为……” ；该词组中的it是形式宾语，词组后面要接that从句，或者直接将宾语放在中间，变成take ... for granted。

10. peer : “同辈” ；此处和上文的counterpart为近义词，本文对同一概念的词使用了不同的表达方式，体现了作者良好的词汇驾驭能力。