冲击波英语专四系列：作文之范文赏析--住校还是租房

题目：Living in University Dormitories or Apartments in the Community

写作要求

Now many college students choose to rent an apartment to enjoy more freedom. Some say it’s quite normal as the students have mostly reached the age of adulthood while others are concerned about their immaturity and security. What is your opinion?

Write on Answer Sheet Two a composition of about 200 words on the following topic:

Living in University Dormitories or Apartments in the Community?

You are to write in three parts.

In the fi rst part, state specifi cally what your idea is.

In the second part, provide reasons to support your opinion OR describe your idea.

In the last part, bring what you have written to a natural conclusion or a summary.

Marks will be awarded for content, organization, grammar and appropriateness. Failure to follow the instructions may result in a loss of marks.

审题思路

本题是一个典型的观点选择型AB的题目，对住校还是出去租房做出选择 ，可以从以下几方面入手 ：

思路1：选择住校，说明住校有什么好处 ：比如同学之间的交流、学校信息的传递等 ；还可以简单说明租房有什么弊端 ，比如安全问题、费用问题等；

思路2 ：选择租房，说明租房有什么好处：比如培养独立性 、与社会接触等 ；还可以简单说明住校有什么弊端，比如受到限制太多、没有私人空间等；

思路3 ：住校和租房结合，说明这种做法有什么好处 ：这时候就将上述好处综合起来说 。

范文赏析

Living in University Dormitories or Apartments in the Community?

I think it is better for college students to live on campus during their first two years, and then move into an apartment for off-campus life as juniors and seniors need the independence of off-campus life. Students’ needs change over four years, so should their housing .

引言部分 ：作者开门见山给出自己的观点：前两年住校后两年租房，并概述了原因——学生需求变化导致 ，表明下文将重点说明这种组合的原因.

Living on-campus makes it easier to get oriented to  the way things are done. The freshmen and sophomores can interact more with other tudents, including not only your roommates, but   everyone in the dormitory. Living in the dormitory also makes a student feel more a part of the university community. There are more opportunities for becoming involved in university activities  and networking with students and university administration.

Living off-campus, however, is a definite advantage for older students. Finding an apartment, dealing with leases and the landlord’s regulations, cooking meals, and fi guring out budgets are all good practice for life after graduation. This kind of independence helps older students grow in adulthood. Off-campus housing also gives students a better perspective on what is going on around them. Getting to know neighbors who are not students is good for students to find out what other people think and feel.

主体部分 ：正文分为两部分，分别说明前两年为什么要住校和后两年出去住有什么好处 。采取的论证手法主要是列举原因和举例说明。

In summary, I think a combination of two years on-campus and two years off-campus is a winning combination for most students.

总结部分 ：作者用in summary 连接上下文，再次说明这种组合对学生是最有利的。

亮点回放

1.  on campus: “在大学校内” ；中间有连字符连接时（on-campus ）用作形容词，反义词为off-campus。

2.  junior: “大三学生”；从大一到大四学生的说法分别是freshman，sophomore，junior，senior。

3.  so should their housing:“他们的住房条件也应如此”；这里要注意so sb. do和so do sb.之间的区别，前者表示“某人确实如此”，后者表示“某人也是如此 ”。另外这里的housing通常只有单数形式 。

4.  get oriented to:“以……为导向”；亦可以写作be  oriented to/toward ，be involved in此处表示 “适应” ，近义词为be adapted to/be adjusted to。

5.  interact:“与……互动”；常用搭配为interact with 。

6.  network:常用作名词 ，表示“网络” ，此处用作动词 ，表示  “沟通” ，常与with搭配。该词的使用体现了作者较大的词汇量 。

7. administration:“管理” ，此处为  “管理部 门” ，与学校入学管理有关 的常用词还有enrollment  （招生 ），registration  （注册 ）等 。

8. lease:“租约”；通常同学们会使用rent ，但lease在此处更贴切 。

9. landlord:“地主、房东” ；如为女房东 ，为landlady 。

10. figure out:“想出、算 出、解决” ；此处也可以用make out代替 。

11. perspective:“看法”；常用搭配为from one s perspective（从某人的角度看 ，即某人认为 ）。

12. in summary:“总而言之，概括来说” ；常用的总结词有in summary，to sum up，in conclusion，to draw a conclusion，in a word，in short，in brief等 。