新TOEFL作文实例解析

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　　(1) W: Students always complain that they have too much load on theirshoulder and they can hardly breathe.

　　R: Students always complain that they have borne/ taken so many loads ontheir shoulder that they can hardly breathe.

　　相关实用短语：shoulder/ bear the burden of the family承担家庭负担;

　　Lighten the burden on enterprises减轻公司负担;

　　unload a burden摆脱负担;burden sb/ oneself with sth=put a burden on sb/oneself=load sb/ oneself加负担于某人/自己

　　(2) W: These kinds of skills can developed as your age..

　　R: They can obtain these kinds of skills as they grow older.

　　(3) W: Mathematic need practice all the time because it allow students toidentify and distinguish the equations.

　　R: Mathematics needs practice all the time because it allows students toidentify and distinguish the equations.

　　W: The language also needs to practice so that students can speakfluently.

　　R: The language also needs to practise so that students can speakfluently.

　　相关实用短语：in practice勤于练习;out of practice疏于练习;practice makesperfect熟能生巧;practise what one preaches身体力行

　　说明：Mathematic是它的adj，用在这里做主语不妥!Practice是 n ;practise是vt.这些问题只要我们在打字输入时稍微认真一些就完全可以避免的，问题很小，所以在这些细节方面出现毛病很不应该!

　　(4)Not only should teacher give assignments depend on the age of students,but also think about the different subject.

　　Better expression: Not only should teacher assign the tasks depend on theages of students, but also take the different subjects into consideration.

　　说明：这个倒装句式使用得很出彩!其中give assignments和首段中的重复，建议改为：assign the tasks; 此外，thinkabout 可以和take something into consideration替换。这样对语言的多样性表达很有帮助!

　　(5)复习单词的小提议：积累单词有很多种方法，就我个人而言，我通常选择通过学习我所做的真题或者模拟题中的高频词来积累，这样可以把词汇带回到题目中去理解，记忆起来也更加方便，当然具体情况具体分析，关键是要适合自己，但是建议大家不妨一试!