托福写作范文点评和思路解析：青少年学生打工

　　写作难点话题一览

　　Is it advisable for a teenage student to have a part-time job?

　　In some countries, teenagers have jobs while they are still students. Do you think this is a good idea?Support your opinion by using specific reasons and details.

　　写作思路展开结构分析

　　这道题目大家首先要注意审题。题目中说的是teenager而不是college students。Teenagers have jobs，这显然是一个BAD idea。Teenager，意指十几岁的孩子——16岁或者18岁以下(18岁以上就是adult了，16、7的孩子往往被称之为 young adults。雇用童工(Employing children labor)目前在很多国家是非法(illegal)的。也违反国际儿童保护条约(International Children Act )。允许雇用童工，或存在童工现象，都是一个国家落后愚昧的表现。所以大家不要说teenager打工可以锻炼自我，teenager需要的是接受教育，健康成长，也不要说teenager打工可以认识社会，teenager还不具备足够的心理承受能力(psychological endurance)，过早步入社会 (early exposure to the real world)，只能导致世界观、价值观(out look of world, value, etc.)的扭曲(deteriorated; distorted)。

　　本话题高分范文赏析

　　People who oppose the idea of students taking part time jobs say that students should use their time to focus on exclusively on studying. I would argue instead that part-time jobs helps students focus on their studies, provides valuable practical experience, and allows them a feeling of success and independence that is a perfect complement to their academic pursuits.

　　A popular criticism of schools is that they are "ivory towers," or places where study and research are divorced from the "real world". A part-time job related to their major gives students an exciting chance to apply the theories they have learned in school. Chemistry is a notoriously abstract, boring, difficult subject. When a student takes a part-time job in a medical research lab, however, he/she might discover how important studying Chemistry is for saving people's lives. This student might then return to his/her Chemistry studies with renewed vigor. What was an abstract academic pursuit becomes a concrete and interesting goal with a real relationship to the student's life.

　　Part-time jobs also help students strengthen their resumes, build important contacts with companies, and familiarize them with the contemporary state of their respective fields. No matter how hard they try, Computer Science textbook publishers cannot keep up with the rapid development of new computer hardware, software, and programming languages. C.S. students who wish to maintain a competitive edge in the job market should find part-time positions where they can learn state-of-the-art techniques. After they graduate from college, they might then return to their part-time employer to look for a full-time position, or approach other employers with good references and cutting-edge work experience.

　　Finally, the feeling of success that comes from holding a part-time job can build students' confidence. Knowing that they can do a job well and be paid for it is an important character-building experience that many students put off for too long. Learning to manage the money that they make will be a critical part of their future lives. If they make mistakes handling their money in college, the results will probably not be disastrous, but will teach them valuable lessons that they will be sure to remember in the future, when they will be truly independent.