令人"无语"的作文,观点在哪里?

Zhang Xiao was recently given a school assignment that asked him to write an essay about his ideal job. The 10-year-old Beijing pupil responded by writing that he wanted to be the head of a large business.
十岁的张晓（音译）在北京读小学。不久前，学校布置了一篇以理想的工作为主题的作文。张晓写到自己想成为一个大老板。

"You want to be a boss, that's OK. But you shouldn't end your article like this. You should write 'I want to do charitable work with the money I earn'," his teacher commented.
老师对这篇作文给出的评语是：“你想当老板，可以。但作文不应该这样收尾。你应该写‘我要把我赚的钱用于慈善事业。’”

Zhang's mother, Chen Chen, said she could see the point of the teacher's advice but suggested a different approach. " He's only 10. We've always instructed him to help those in need. But charity? I don't think he really understands the word at the moment.
张晓的母亲陈晨（音译）说，她理解老师的用意，但建议老师换一种方式给出建议。“张晓才10岁。作为父母我们一直都教育他要乐于助人。但要做慈善？我觉得他当时根本连这个词什么意思都不懂。”

Chen referred to her own bitter experience as a fourth-grader. She described "the weather, the attendee, who was chosen to raise the flag" and so on in a writing assignment on the topic of "Raising the flag". However, despite her honesty, Chen's essay was deemed "a very bad example".
陈晨还提到了自己一段不开心的经历，四年级时她写了一篇以“升旗仪式”为主题的作文。她描述了诸如“天气以及升旗手”等方面，尽管句句属实，但最后却被评为“反面教材”。

The young girl quickly identified the difference: The other children had written sentences such as "The red flag was dyed by the blood of the martyrs," or "The flag reminds us of the sacrifice the heroes made". That kind of sentences was missing from Chen’s.
当时还是小女孩的陈晨很快就发现了不同之处：其他小朋友都在作文中都出现类似“鲜艳的五星红旗是用革命先辈的鲜血染红的，”或“五星红旗要我们铭记先辈们所作出的牺牲”这样的句子，而她却一句都没写。

This is the unwritten rule for Chinese students: You can write what you think, but make sure it reflects your "positive thinking".
对于中国学生而言，这是条不成文规定：你可以想到什么就写什么，但作文要反映出积极思想。

The problems are really highlighted by the gaokao, China's grueling and life-changing college entrance examination.
在高考这一能改变一生命运、竞争激烈的考试中，这一问题更加突出。

"The articles have always been highly stereotyped, but more so in recent years," said Qi Yongxiang, who has been an examiner for the writing exam since 1993. "There is not much diversity or originality, instead it's full of cliches. They write some beautiful sentences, but without making a point."
自1993年起便一直参与高考作文阅卷工作的齐永祥（音译）说道：“高考作文大多千篇一律，缺乏创新，尽是些陈词滥调。考生们罗列一些优美语句，却无法阐明观点。”

Nowadays, the common practice is to prepare stories about famous people, adorned with beautiful sentences, and then find a way to shoehorn them into the essay, irrespective of the actual topic.
现在最常见的做法就是考前准备一些名人轶事，配上优美语句，不管实际命题是什么，想方设法把这些句子塞进文章中就好。

Zhang Yikun, one of nine million students who sat this year's gaokao, really know how it works。
作为今年参加高考的900万考生之一，张一坤（音译）对此一清二楚。