名师托福作文评改：学校比家里好

II.   Editorial Comments
 
1.     Original: First, conventional school education provides you good opportunities to make friends and to develop your social skills. Revised: First, conventional school education provides you with good opportunities to make friends and develop your social skills.
 
动词“provide”用于表达提供的意思时，必须和“with”, and “for”这样的介词联用。比如：Mr. Bee provided Ron with a pen and pencil for his TOEFL test. OR Ron worked hard in order to provide food and shelter for his family.
 
2.     Original: Second, studying in classes is much easier to concentrate on learning knowledge than at home. Revised: Second, it is much easier to concentrate on studying in classes than it is at home.
 
两件事相互比较用，用（much）more than结构。同时要注意，（much）more than前后结构要一致。 另外，原句中studying in classes作为主语稍显冗长，用it代替效果会好些。
 
3.     Original: I am the sort of person who has been studying in school for twelve years and will be continued studying in school for five years. Revised: I am someone who has been studying in school for twelve years and will continue studying for five more years.
 
Be continued是被动语态，用在这里显然不对。作者的原意可能是想用将来进行时，但continue 已经有动作持续的意思了，所以用将来时就可以。
 
III.  Alternative Expressions
 
A.     The expression “enter society” is used as if someone is entering a place. Example: He left school and entered society. Other ways to express such meaning includes:
(i)enter the real world” – Example: After graduation he was ready to enter the real world.
(ii)“enter the professional world” – usually referring to entering the job market. Example: Her MBA training prepared her to enter the professional world.
(iii)“return to civilization” – used as if someone is returning to society/mankind, after spending time away in the wilderness. Example: After hiking for two months in the Himalayas and surviving on beans, I was ready to return to civilization and eat a hamburger and fries.
 
B.     The expression “face to face” refers to the act of doing something directly oneself. Example: Henry’s girlfriend was upset that Henry called to apologize instead of saying it face to face.
(i)“in person” – Example: You can either mail the check to our office or drop it off in person.
(ii)“man to man” (or “person to person”) – Example: Although Michael made big deals through lawyers and contracts, his father was old fashioned and only made deals man to man.
 
C.      The expression “to boost one’s confidence” refers to the act of something increasing one’s confidence. Example: Kobe’s high TOEFL score boosted his confidence to apply to foreign universities. Other useful ways to express such meaning:
(i)“confidence booster” – Example: Winning the track race was a confidence booster for Forrest.
(ii)“to inflate his/her ego” – Example: As a student Christina was very humble, but her success as a famous international pop singer really inflated her ego.
(iii)“to boost morale” – (used for a group) Example: Since the school volleyball team had lost their two previous games, the win today really helped boost morale for the team.