名师点评网友BEC初级作文(2)
2010-05-13来源:和谐英语
网友作文二:
To: All staff
From: Hope0068
Everybody know that smoking is dangerous for your health. And the The studies didn't just point to the ill effects of smoking on those who smoke--non-smokers, too. [1] Notice is hereby given that the smoking area is located in the special corner[2] of the first floor of this building. This come into force on[3] September 15th.
Thanks.
名师指导:
[1]Memo 的主要作用就是提醒同事们注意事项,这和吸烟有多有害不相干,去掉。改为:to assure working environment
[2]一般的公司都应该给个room
[3]from
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